Her worst dreams had come true. He indeed had betrayed her faith. He always said he loved her, but did he really love her? That one message on his cell phone proved that she had been right. “Love, see you at 8 tonight”, beeped a message on his iPhone. As he entered the room to check his phone, he heard her slam the front door and he followed her as she walked towards the beach. He shouted after her asking her to listen to him, but she’d had enough. She wanted to leave him but it was impossible to do so while she was alive. Before he could tell her that the message was from his step sister, who had invited them for dinner, she was gone. Lost in the deep blue ocean, forever.
Pic courtesy: Here
Inspired from one of my favourite songs by Enrique Iglesias:
From the coast of Ipanema
to the Island of Capri
all the way to Kuala Lumpur
I will follow you wherever you may beFrom the moment, I first saw you
Knew my heart could not be free
Had to hold you in my arms
There can never be another for me
Written for :
Women I tell you !! Sigh, sad story !!! 😦
Another version of my comment :
Whaaaat ??? she left him????? that lucky *beeeeeep* !! 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀
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yeah yeah … i think the ladies hostel exp is still in your mind …. !
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Hehe.. Vimmuu you are happy for that guy? 😛 that shows how much he suffered in the ladies hostel.. post ladies hostel effect.. lol.. he will become alright in a few days..
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LOL @ he will become alright 😉
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no no no ….
not a sad story, please !
err … isnt he fast enough to stop her ? i mean guys are quicker than girls .. so he couldnt have stopped her , right ?
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😀 Hehe.. yeah true he could have easily stopped her.. but what if the message was not from his step sister 😉 just kidding.. I got inspired by seeing that girl drown in the video of “Rhythm Divine” of Enrique..
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ha ha !
ok
btw, i liked the colour of the new template … this is the first time am seeing this shade on a blog .. Good choice
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Thanks Deepa 🙂 Glad you liked the template! 😀
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listen to your heart
when he’s calling for you
Listen to your heart
before you tell him goodbye
🙂
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wow! that was a nice stanza you wrote.. 🙂
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Gud one 🙂
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If she didnt trust her husband enough to know if he wud have an affair or not… and he didnt trust her enough to tell her about his step-sister… then they BOTH deserved that stupid ending! Good riddance! Hmph! 😐
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Hehe 🙂 Too good Ash.. they did deserve the ending since they dint trust each other 🙂
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but i feel all this trust and sincerity and faith are only in the books …. in real life, u really cant trust anyone .. and need to take care of yourself !
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agree with you Deepa.. trust and all other things happen only in romantic movies/books.. in real life, one should be really careful
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LOL Ash 😉 u do hv a point there 😛
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Excellent point there Ash 😀
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Just goes to show the importance of dialogue…
And the hazards of iPhones… 😀
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Hehe.. now you know that you shouldnt get iphone and even if you own one, never leave it unattended in front of your future wife 😉 😀
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sush..sush..sush…women!!! even their creator cant understand them 🙂
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Naah..see this lady in the story couldnt understand her husband, that’s why she died.. so it is men that women dont understand properly 😛
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so much truth in that line 😛
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hehe. I speak only truth 😛
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Thats sad AK.. 😦 😦 but why he was so slow????
he needs some running practice….
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Hehe.. maybe he had polio attack in his childhood or had to walk using crutches 🙂 He probably couldnt run 😉
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@ Kanagu : Good point
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Oh dear…. wot the… sun toh leti!!! so much misunderstanding damm!!!
Sid,
Check out Holy Cow!!!
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🙂 Haan yaar.. probably she was little deaf..Holy cow rocks Sid.. have been reading every comic on it.. For comic lovers like myself, it is like a boon 🙂
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What a tragic end…it certainly makes us ponder at these moments. It is amazing what love and the emotions can create in the mind. Nicely written.
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Thanks Write Girl and welcome to my blog 🙂 Yeah sometimes misunderstandings can be fatal. The best solution in such cases is to communicate and get doubts clarified!
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Hi Avada;
Short but the impact is great!
I like this tale of yours. But I hate how foolish women turn to be and without listening to explanations. However, was he true? What prompted her to end their relationship and even her life?
He must have been a consistent chauvinist!
Very good tale, very apt with the picture prompt!
Please find time to drop by my place to read mine. Thanks in advance!
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Thanks for reading Amity and welcome to my blog! 🙂 Yeah sometimes people take wrong steps due to anger. What one should do is talk to their partner once their anger subsides and probably get their doubts clarified 🙂
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Sad one…but well, instead of trying to catch up with her BEFORE explaining, he could just have screamed out tht th msg was from his step sister!
Men, I tell you! 😀
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🙂 yeah screaming out would have saved her life.. men are always men 😉
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I dont think she would have even looked back! the basis is trust and if she lacked it, she should have left him, but not to die..
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Yeah even if he had shouted, she would have assumed that he is lying just to stop her 😀
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Sigh! Its always better to talk it out than to keep things inside urself and take decisions 😦
I wud hv loved her to live even if the msg ws from another girl 😛
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hehe.. sorry for killing her 😉
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Short and bittersweet…
My story is not as short and crisp, but sortof on these lines.
http://multistoriedbuilding.wordpress.com/2010/07/07/love-and-hate/
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Thanks Astantine and welcome to my blog!! Now hopping over to read your version of the story 🙂
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When one is angry they take most irrational steps …..but would have liked a happier ending but maybe the picture has some sad inclinations ….
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Yeah I could have made her survive but felt it would make it bollywoodish.. he running after her and saving her at the last min.. thanks Dhiman 🙂
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The narration is good…maybe there was some other reason too and she wanted to punish him…material for another story, Ashwini!
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Oh yeah you gave me another idea to write on 🙂 Maybe I will write something like a prequel to this story.. what made her kill herself 🙂 Thanks Sandhya!!
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LOL
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What an irony. Hey I like this template very much. The last template was too much on the eye. This is one is very good
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Thanks Venky.. glad you liked the template.. I was thinking maybe this one was too simple.. but is more soothing than the old one right?
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Sad, such misunderstanding.
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Thanks for visiting Maddie and welcome to my blog 🙂
Yep misunderstandings are bad!
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Much Better!! Much Much Better!!!
I am talking of the template… I love Georgia btw.. and this one really soothing..
And as for your post, irony is that no one can explain why she took that step. She could have filed for a divorce, and got a grand alimony and lived her life again 😛
And the villain here is a Step sister!! Well I guess you could have come up with a bit realistic, here.. Like mom.. but still hey, did’nt she notice the name on the message?
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Thanks Hemal 🙂 I loved this template too.. It’s a new one from WP team.. the previous one was designed by me, all by myself 🙂
Hehe.. she loved him so much that she can’t live without him 😛 His mom she knows right? He hasnt told her about his step-sis so she couldnt recognize.. hehe.. bollywoodish 😛
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yep! a lot bollywoodish… 😛
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hehe 😀
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aww .. why so dramatic and tragic end ??
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🙂 Welcome to my blog ladynimue.. yeah I made it pretty dramatic but just wanted to showcase how people easily misjudge someone and take extreme steps sometimes.. People often dont think rationally when they are angry 🙂
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true .. am glad most don’t kill themselves like this !!!
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Very true 🙂
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Moral of the story: Listen to your heart but don’t keep assuming, stop and listen to your hubby/wife as well.
Don’t doubt them all the time it is injurious for your life and the health of your relationship 😀 😀
A very different kind of a story Avada 🙂 🙂
Keep ’em coming girl 😀
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Hey CB.. coming from you it is really a huge compliment 🙂 You expertise in writing stories like these and this was my first attempt at it.. thanks girl 🙂 so glad you liked it.. And agree with the moral 🙂
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Awww… that’s sad! 😦
Gr8 writing girl! 😀
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Thanks a lot EC 🙂
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Damn … why she had to die like this ??? ….
… That’s why I advise people not to build a house near beach … 😛
anywayz , a better option could have been killing the hubbie and then running away …. 😀
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Hehe.. right Harsh.. this is why people should not stay close to beaches 😉
Aaah.. that was a good idea 😛 but then she would have spent her entire life in jail na
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lol .. she was going to die anyway … may be she could have killed her hubbie and then committed suicide …. 😉
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Haha..that would’ve been awesome 🙂
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Sad story but people should have more faith and trust.
PS – I love that song by him too 🙂
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True 🙂 more faith and trust is the key…
Oh you love that song too! as soon as I saw this pic, I remembered that song and Enrique! 🙂
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Awesome post, Avada! But why shoulld the message read ‘Love,…’. I doubt if siblings would address each other that way?!
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thanks Pal.. 🙂
you have a valid point there Pallavi 🙂 I just wanted to make his wife suspect him..
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Hauntingly b’ful short story………
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Thanks Mayank 🙂 and welcome to my blog! 😀
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acting in haste and repenting at leisure..but here she left someone else to regret..
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Yeah true.. acting in haste doesnt do good to anyone.. thanks for reading Renu 🙂
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What a lot of complications .. Actually I spent more time wondering which Enrique song that was..Heehee 😀
p.s. – Sorry bout my absence. My laptop was virus infected & I was changing projects at work so couldn’t manage time to post or read yours 😦 I have missed U.
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Hehehe..
compilatedcomplicated story right? 😀 It’s Rhythm Divine.. I was inspired by the video of the song..Missed you too! and glad to have you back 🙂
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hey .. where’s ur independence day post ? isnt that the latest ??
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oops sorry.. I commented on that post and totally forgot to put a link for that here: http://evanescentthoughts.wordpress.com/2009/01/26/jai-hind
It was actually an old post that I had reposted for Independence Day 🙂
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1. Your favourite mobile is iPhone (gotcha!).
2. Doesn’t iPhone display the name/number of the sender above the text?iPhone sms’ got a mail like apperance.
3. According to Karudapurana, she goes to hell for being ignorant and she gets impaled there as a punishment.
4. The passage is about saperation is ‘inspired’ from Enrique’s lines, which itself is about being togather.
5. The picture posted here doesn’t look like a suicide mission, but she is proud of being strange.
6. The above ‘inventions’ can be considered for the nobel prize in literature. No applause needed.
7. Yes, I deserve a punch in my chin for commenting this wonderful article.
Prasad
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Avada’s fan? LOL
1. yesss!!
2. It shows the name. It was a girl’s name, that’s why she killed herself 😉
3. hehe 😛
4. Nope not inspired by the lines… I should have specifically put that.. my bad.. it was inspired by the video of the song. In the video, the girl drowns herself in the ocean, even when the hero is following her, asking her to come back 😀
5. 😛
6. nobel prize? thank you 😛
7. I punched you for commenting.. check your face in the mirror..
Jokes apart, that was one of the most sarcastic comments I have ever received 🙂 😀 😀 😀 😀
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Doesn’t want to be ur fan? fine. back to my real name. COL (crying out load!)
1. No. you are tierd of iPhone.
2. yes. She could kill herself a lot of times for every female name in his phone.
4. I ve seen that vid. It was an oxymoron for being away from him, where he coudn’t reach.
6. You can try for pulitzer next time.
7. You haven’t. May be a strong reply will do. May be I can punch myself if I come to B’lore.
This wasn’t a joke (black comedy?, i donno) . showed ur dark side of writing. My type! Expect a lot in future!
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nooo.. COL.. change it to Avada’s fan.. 😀
1. I have become anti-iphone.. unable to unlock mine 😦
2. 😛 what if she had 7 lives like a cat ?
4. hmm yep
6. Naah.. I dont believe in that award. Have read few books which were selected by them.. they were boring to the core
7. Hehe. punching yourelf is a good idea 😛
Thanks Prasad 🙂
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Rewinded back..
1. You can do that in some shops in anekal or brigade road. Don’t call urself a bangalorean.
2. cat with 7 lives? that was a joke right?
7. will do that on this saturday, 8 a.m. u can count on this.
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I need to try that.. mine is a new firmware, supposedly there is no hack for it.. I tried unlocking myself and now the device died completely 😦
it’s a myth right that cat has multiple lives or something.. I dont believe in that but just a joke to me..
8 a.m sunday? what’s the proof that you indeed hit yourself?
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Oh wow!. Time to go off-topic.
I think you are one of the super rich girl who became victim to the fake websites. I ll guess how you tried it. First, u googled with a word ‘iphone firmware 3.1.3 or 4.0. Then you might have gone into some website in the first page of results. Then, you got some 6 or 7 steps. Then your device is dead. Right? You can sell it to “Ashwini Mobiles” in Mars. May be next time you try with HTC ones.
What proof you need? Saturday has gone. May be I can bang my head in wall to mourn for ur dead iPhone.
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grrrrrr Prasad.. I am neither super rich nor am I dumb.. I did follow the hacks by the famous hackers.. but what they mention there, doesnt work for all iphones.. lot of people got their phones screwed.. now waiting for a hack for the latest version..
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You ‘followed’ famous hackers! you ll become more famous than them, if you can do that. It’s not that easy frnd.
The solution is simple. You just need to get the copy the OS files from iPhone GSM and get it installed in ur iPhone AT&T or anything. But u need an old apple notebook to do this, with fresh MacOS dated before the iPhone release, without an online update. Quite rare and tricky, but we made it worked for my brother.
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I dint understand.. what do you mean by copy AT&T OS? explain me your method in detail.. let me give it a try once
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thats so tragic…
well narrated …
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🙂 thanks Rajlakshmi
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A beautiful, touching story. 🙂 I love Enrique’s songs, and this one fit in really well.
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🙂 thanks Sakhi and welcome to my blog!
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