Fiction 55 – Second attempt

Here is another pathetic attempt at writing 55 fiction. Hope you guys will like it!

Wikipedia says “55 Fiction is a form of microfiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.”

A literary work will be considered 55 Fiction if it has:

  1. Fifty-five words or less (A non-negotiable rule)
  2. A setting,
  3. One or more characters,
  4. Some conflict, and
  5. A resolution. (Not limited to moral of the story)
  6. The title of the story is not part of the overall word count, but it still can’t exceed seven words.

The Elevator

Arun and Darshak were in the elevator with 10 other people.
Arun: ?????gave up??????
Darshak: What?
Arun: ??????up smokiii???????
Darshak: Oh okay. That’s very nice
Everyone else got down from the elevator except for Arun and Darshak.
Arun: What okay dumbo?
Darshak: I thought you gave up smoking
Arun: Aaaaaah! I asked you if you did

This is another kinda non-fiction but I never had this kind of conversation, so I guess it qualifies under fiction 😛 . But I have nodded my head whenever I could not hear properly what the other person said in a crowded elevator. We should never converse in an elevator. Because how many times can we say “what?”. The last thing I would want is the other person thinking that I am deaf.

I got this idea when today I had a similar issue:

Me: So are you working on the project “Eureka” now?
He: No ??????working on????????
Me: what?
He: working on????????
Me: okay nice.. See you. It’s my floor.

I still have no clue which project he is working on 😀 I will put this question to him again, the next time I meet him (but not in the elevator please!)

46 thoughts on “Fiction 55 – Second attempt

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  1. Is the reactions in nodding even when you don’t understand is because you might a little, teeny weeny bit really hard of hearing??!! 😀
    (It is the Reason in my case! :P)

    Liked them. Too good. 🙂


    1. hehe.. maybe you are right.. because sometimes I had this problem even outside the elevator and I, somehow, dont have a good noise filter in my ear probably 😀 but “okay nice” kind of covers it up 😉


  2. hey good one avada! Your thinking is always on a different track! Don’t ask me which one. I dunno!! 😛
    Even the same thing happened for me sometime back in a mall when i was in lift with my cousin!


    1. Hey..dont let down urself by saying pathetic attempt…. Its good…. These attempts are really good.. and your 55 is amazing..good work…I especially liked the first one..comparatively..


  3. lol.. yeah tht happens quite oftn.. moreovr sumtime u jus giv a nod nd smile wn u do not undrstnd wat the othr is saying.. Nd suddenly he/she asks for a reply nd thr u r caught 🙂

    nd hey Shankar is jus being nice here. It was indeed a pathetic attempt.. oooooo. um so bad :p


    1. u could have made it a lil bit more interesting or funnier perhaps.. coz a lotta misinterpretations happen in elevators..


    2. yes..vipul..a little bit pathetic… but we should not let her down from making her next pathetic attempt.. just a sort of encouragement.. and you know.. I wont even try a 55… atleast she is coming out with pathetic attempts.. so I feel its a good attempt…


  4. I do this often, while talking over the phone. Sometimes, the lines will not be clear or we will have some noise from the next door auto shop and I keep on asking ‘what what’ and then just say ‘is it so’ and hang up! Next time, I get caught when they tell me that they already have given the news to me!

    You have not made up anything…just a simple story, nice.


    1. thanks for dropping in 🙂 wiki linked because I dont want to get arrested for copying text from there 😛 Yeah I think mine wasnt that good.. but I just wanted to say what happened to me today and I just chose a medium to express 🙂


  5. Nice second attempt though I had not understood the first time but I am like that with 55 ers I take more time to understand, actually too little words you see….:D


  6. I love your 55 fiction. It is such a slice of life. I have a huge problem of not understanding what ppl say, and usually wind up smiling vaguely at them.


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